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Monday, May 23, 2016

Term 2 Week 2
W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when my recount has a
First Draft

The Worst Day

Me, dad and mum went for a drink of water and saw lions and every  step we  took when the lions pounced  and  run after as and then my heart
Was pounding like a drum.I’ve never felt so alone,frightened or helpless
before.I could  hear the lions behind  me and they were getting closer and

closer.The entire pride seemed to be in the water with me tearing at me with treesharp.

2 comments:

  1. Well I like how you tell us how you are and where you were and what happened. And I like how you felt when the lions jump’d on you. And that you tell how you are with your mum and dad. And how the lions got you in the lake and how you felt in the story. Describe more about what you are doing.

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  2. That is cool and I like your facts and I like that your sense good

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