The Present

In the past weeks our class (Ako Ngatahi) were writing a short story about a video titled “The Present”. It was a story about a boy who got a present and it was a puppy. After he discovered that the puppy only had three legs.

Here is the video, I assume that you might enjoy the video and maybe my writing too bye!

“The Present”

W.A.L.T: Write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

My best friend Max

It was a normal day I was playing on my xbox360. And then I heard mum.

I saw mum with a big brown box. I that it was a Xbox1. She put the box in front of me and then she opened the blinds ”Mum, it’s too bright". Then the phone went (beep beep). Mum answered. I opened the box. It was a puppy. But he only had 3 legs he was just like me! I was mad. He wanted to play but i did not he find a red ball. So He put the Ball on the side of me.

I kicked it then he run after the ball he was fast for a little puppy with 3 legs. He acted really silly. Then I said to myself "Why not play with the puppy?" I got my crutches and told mum that i was going outside. And I got the ball and we played all day. And we will always be together    

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